You Decide
Some people don't like a poem that rhymes.The wind chimes.
Exposing our crimes.
Like snitches dropping dimes.
Get me a tequila with limes!
I've tried to change how many times.
Without a voice were all similar painted mimes.
But were all different people many different kinds.
And all I keep hearing is nothing but whines.
So lets all dress to the nines.
And take a vacation and head to the pines.
Or we'll turn in to robots walking in lines.
You decide..
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A rhyme scheme can make a poem stronger or weaker depending on how it's used. If you didn't have to rhyme, what would you want to write a poem about? That's the important bit. The rhyme is only there to emphasize the importance and meaning of the poem. Don't give up! this was a fun read <3
I really liked how this read playfully but had a dark undertone surrounding individuality.
Whimsical, I enjoyed it.
I found this poem fluid and eclectic
I liked the end the best
Go to search and search up Bentley English please and thankyou
Go to search and search up Bentley English please and thankyou
I think there is a place for rhyme in poetry and you used it well.
I like how it all rhymes!
i love poems that rhyme
Very funny!
I would like this piece of work to have more depth
Reminds me of Red Hot Chili Peppers. I really like this style and the way that is uses incoherency to actually force you to think about it. well done
great write, I really enjoyed it. I love the line " without a voice we're similar painted mimes."
I enjoy the statement of this piece that you're going to rhyme whether others like it or not!
Where is the moral
It was nice and fun, but some of the rhymes felt forced
The idea, use of words, rhyming everything was great. I wonder why rating is so low.
Loved it
I love the playfulness and spontaneity in this poem! It has a great energy, and you’ve captured a sense of frustration and humor, especially with the back-and-forth between serious thoughts and lighthearted asides (like “Get me a tequila with limes!”). The way you mix existential reflection with casual moments makes the poem feel very relatable and real, almost like a stream of consciousness.
Loved the layers to this one
The rhyming scheme makes sense so we'll done.
I love the little message at the end
The message is good, the poem is fun! It could be enhanced if each line had a deeper meaning other than just rhyming.
i would love to see this rewritten with a deeper context, I believe I would go far!
I love the way you used your words and emotions
Well, I think that explains that! So, I say well done!!
You can try as much as you can to be making use of allegories to deal with neoclassical and sentiments in literature.
This is a fun read, but I do think that exploring different kinds of poetry is a great way to improve. Sometimes it's easy to get offended when people say to change things. But trust me, being willing to explore different forms of poetry is not going to turn you into a robot; it might even help add more diversity and emotion to your portfolio!
WELL DONE! THAT WAS A MASTERPIECE
i like the fluidness of the poem, great read.
i like the fluidness of the poem, great read.
i like the fluidness of the poem, great read.
I like your style of writing. It extenuated all the words you used, really like this!
I like your style of writing. It extenuated all the words you used, really like this!
I love the fluidity of the poem, really is a beautiful piece
This was a good idea at its base. Keep thinking on this one...
I love poems that rhymes :)
Forced rhymes can misconstrue meaning.
This made me laugh and I think its so honest and true. Good Job!
How can i not leave a comment I love poems that rhyme This community makes me feel so freee No rules attached
You make a really good point there nice you did excellent work on this
nice! funny poem
For rhyme, the overall poem became clumsy. Appreciate the first few lines though. Very beautiful.