Eternal love
When the sun is getting red, my soul is thereWhen the sea is getting calm, my heart is there
When the mountains are full of snow, my love is there
When the wind is blowing
and trees are bending over the ground, my fear is there
When the moon is hiding behind the clouds
,
my secrets are finding a good place
When the sky is full of stars,
my dreams are smiling to me nice
When the rain is falling down,
I can stop my tears
When the birds are flying in the sky,
peace is embracing me with love and joys,
Truth is filling my heart with eternal love of the god there
Praising nature, our true lives gift!
truley amazing
This one is cute.
Love how you ended it with God! I especially like the lines where you said "When the rain is falling down, I can stop my tears" that is moving. That is a picture I have never seen or heard of before. Wonderful job!
This beautifully poetic piece captures the profound connection between nature and the human soul, reflecting emotions through vivid imagery of natural elements. The evocative language and rhythmic flow create a serene and introspective atmosphere, highlighting the interplay of love, fear, dreams, and peace in our lives.
Extremely powerful poem
Strong imagery and excellent movement through the poem. Unfortunately the simplistic language and the overuse of "When the" statements makes the poem seem redundant and puerile.
Good job!
Quando o interior fala, a paz permanece.
I like the relationship between emotions and nature.
Nice
Beautiful imagery. I love to use stuff like this too in my poems. Thanks.
Good
Really good poem, the repeating 'when' at the beginning really builds up tension and makes it sort of exciting.
beautiful
Absolutely astonishing !!!!!
It's catchy!
I enjoyed the imagery with nature.
Very calming lines , good work.
GREAT POEM
Peaceful
Nice one.
The effect nature has on emotion was great inspiration to pull from beautiful imagery!
Very peaceful with calm. Nice.
Your poem was beautiful. You love the way all do, but you channeled your love toward God, and that is a very hard thing to talk about in public. You are brave, talented, and have a heart full of care, love, and the power of truth. You're a giant living among mortals.
The repetition of "when" really made it so great. Eternal Love with a perfect ending.
True words. I was amazed at the end. The end was so unexpected and beautiful.
Beautiful and powerful! Great job!
lovelyyy creationn
i feel like it has a very catchy start that works well with the ideas of emotion linked with the world almost like tune you could mumble but i think it stops the rhythm midway despite it being a very good theme .
Very vivid poem!
Beautiful !
I was very encouraged that you posted a poem about God, lots of time we get pushed down because of our belief. This gives me courage to speak up.
Rhythm is interesting
rythmic writing
I think you captured an appreciation for nature that is admirable. I love this
Truly captivating
Such a beautiful poem! Nature reflects different emotions so smoothly, with a calming rhythm throughout. The images of snow-covered mountains, the moon, and flying birds all come together to create a peaceful vibe. The rhythm and rhyme give it a lovely flow.
Hello fellow poets. I'm new here but I'm quickly realizing that a lot of people feel that appreciating a poem has to be all praise. If we proceed that way it would mean that all poems should earn a five-star rating. If you rate a poem as a 2, a 3 or even a 4, it means the poem falls short in something. It's okay to praise a poem and then say however, ... That way a poet gets honest feedback and is pushed to work harder next time and will improve. Because if we only praise, a poet may feel that every one of their poems is a hall-of-famer at the level of Masters like Shakespeare and Tennyson, and we all know that we are leagues away from their genius. So please, for all poems, let us make an honest appraisal by offering praise when it is deserved, but by also coldly criticizing shortfalls.
The last line made me re-read the poem and I took it as, the love is there, you just have to find it. The message was great, but the shift from repetition to the rest of the lines was a little odd. Overall I loved the message, and I want to see you write another one with better line transitions.
I had some trouble following the flow of your poem, but I loved the overall feel of the appreciation of nature. Made me smile internally.
Very beautiful
Love it!
Nice work...
I felt this started really strong and tapered off in the middle then ramped back up at the end. If the middle was as solid as the rest this would be golden!
I liked this poem i loved line "When the mountains are full of snow, my love is there" i also wrote similar kind of poem like this poem called She can you read my poem pls pls
Great poem
Good imagery. Dig into the "my dreams" and "my secrets" lines. Maybe find a dark night sky and ponder its vastness.
I really enjoyed reading this poem. The way it connects nature with different emotions is so beautiful—it feels like the poet found a way to capture the essence of both the inner and outer world. I love how each element of nature reflects a different part of the emotional experience: the sun and the calm sea symbolizing peace and love, while the wind and bending trees convey fear.
Love the imagery.
Love the connection between the nature and varying emotions.
We all are connected to the nature in different ways. love this idea and how the poem expresses it!
Beautiful calming poem.
I really connected with this poem—it feels so peaceful and deeply personal. The way it ties emotions to nature makes every feeling more vivid, like I can see and feel each moment. I love how it moves from love and dreams to fear and secrets, then ends with a sense of truth and divine love. It reminds me of those quiet moments when everything around me reflects what’s in my heart. Such a beautiful and calming piece—it really made me pause and reflect.
Loving the talk and love of nature here. Good poem!
I think it is more than just a "pretty" or "cute" poem, but truly beautiful. It immerses the narrator and their feelings into the environment around them, and after all, are we not all a part of the beautiful things that surround us (nature, sea, trees, rain...)
I love the way you connected nature with emotions through imagery. Beautiful poem
we are all connected to nature and your images were dead on
Vivid imagery and emotional depth, this poem is beautiful.
Vivid and powerful. I loved it
Absolutely beautiful poem and sentiments, too.
So beautiful!
Nice one
love how strong the imagery in this piece is, also i love nature so it goes hand in hand LOL.
love how strong the imagery in this piece is, also i love nature so it goes hand in hand LOL.
love how strong the imagery in this piece is, also i love nature so it goes hand in hand LOL.
love how strong the imagery in this piece is, also i love nature so it goes hand in hand LOL.
LOVELY USE OF POETIC DEVICES!!!
Direct connection of nature and the human soul. A fulfilling work.
The poem explores the connection between the author's emotions and nature, using natural elements to represent her inner thoughts. The crimson sun symbolizes warmth, while the serene sea symbolizes peace. Snowy mountains evoke love and purity. The moon symbolizes the hidden aspects of the speaker's life, causing the poem to shift in tone. Rainfall offers comfort and healing, while flying birds symbolize freedom and tranquility. The poem also touches on the spiritual connection to God through the earth's beauty. Overall, it honors the interplay between natural elements and individual emotions.
I love the connection that the person has to nature and expresses a different feel. The symbolizes goes deep into every part of nature.
I really love how you showed your journey with faith and reconnecting with nature. I think it's awesome that you show parts of yourself as scattered, just to say that the whole time they were together. However, your pattern of "___ is there" feels a little bit unsteady. Maybe you could try making your repeated lines a little more consistent?
Last line shows a journey from emotion to peace, from nature to the divine. Awesome!!!
Wow, its incredible
love the simple praising of Nature, its always good to care for our common home. Love this!!
Love the ties into nature, beautiful piece.
truly amazing! rate mine?
truly amazing! rate mine?
Beautifully written.
The line about the moon--I love it! Psalm 19:1!
Really enjoyed the depth and creativity of the first half. Somehow, I git lost in the last half. Good work, though.
What???????
Simple but there
love the juxtaposition of natural imagery and human emotions and spiritual imagery
Very deep and honest.
Calm and relaxing
Sort of static. Nice message, however the poem is not immersive the language is simplistic and lacks emotional or poetic presence. The connection between the speaker's feelings (such as love fear and their heart) and the nature described falls flat.
Amazing !!
Good poem, more punctuation would strengthen it.
full of serenity one sits with upon peace. i have to read this to my girlfriend when she gets off the phone.
Interesting , in this , with words u are creating the feel that u intended n , it becomes a marvellous poem
Nice imagery
I love the last 5 lines, so happy you decided to write about God! "When the rain is falling down/I can stop my tears" You captured a very powerful feeling in those lines. Hone in on that feeling!!
Quite lovingly
You did a great job on your poem I thought it was really good keep up the great wwork
I love how nature and the body resonate with colors.
i really liked this! really nice imagery
I love how u connect nature to feelings.
Good poem
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It's a good poem, very straightforward and it admires nature," when the mountains are full of snow, my heart is there"- beautiful
I love, love, LOVE this imagery! The connection to nature paints a vivid picture. I can see this poem almost as if it were a picture book. Btw if this was in a picture book or a set of posters/paintings I would totally get/display it.
Hey I loved the concept you chose and the way you describe it. But one thing I felt missing is when you pointed out fear, I couldn't picture it so that broke the flow.