The Time We Didn't Have
There are so many words in this language to saybut when his name is called, there is no right way
He was loved by so many no one could disagree
Why did he have to leave before he met me
There are so many stories, laughs, and cries
The love for him still shines in my father's eyes
Why did he go, why couldn't I meet him
Many people say things happen for a reason
Although it is true, I still don't understand
Why did he go before I got to touch his hands
He left behind a daughter and a wife
He should have had a much longer life
Although I never met him I still could say
He is the best great-grandfather to this day
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The Time We Didn't Have
PoetValerie Prazdnik
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The Time We Didn't Have
PoetValerie Prazdnik
Beautiful, meaningful poem
Most people don't truly appreciate the difficulty in creating couplets. You have only two lines to convey a single message. While quatrains offer you the safety of four lines and other forms offer even greater flexibility, couplets are less forgiving. You have done a very good job with maintaining thematic consistency throughout the poem with each couplet building upon the previous and serving as a transition to the next. The only real issue I see with this is the rhythm is in need of some work in places and the rhyme (or near rhyme) in the fourth stanza needs improvement. Otherwise, nicely done.
Good. But work more next time to improve your diction in condensed summaries yet the message unchanged.
Nice poem, keep writing.
Beautiful!
Touching and meaningful
Beautiful! Well done! Thank you!
Cute.
Very sweet poem i relate to this sort of longing
aww it's both adorable and well constructed!
Very touching poem.
Great write, I felt it.
I think the stanzas could be rearranged to make something really outstanding. It looks like a four stanza poem to me: the fourth, fifth, and last stanzas don't add much that's new. I would end the poem with the second stanza, which is a great thematic summary of the poem (although the first line could be changed to "He was loved by so many it is plain to see" to keep better rhythm). BTW love the third stanza. Great stuff here, I think it could be improved by taking stanzas 1, 2, 3, 6 and arranging them. 4/5
This poem speaks to the deep sorrow and longing of never getting to meet someone who is loved and remembered. The way you express the questions and confusion—“Why did he have to leave before he met me?”—is heartfelt and relatable. It’s clear that, even without knowing him personally, the speaker feels a connection to this person through the love others still carry for him.
This poem is absolutely beautiful! I'm sorry for your pain
Great
Wow, great poem!
This is beautiful. Loss is really difficult, I'm glad you found poetry as an outlet.
Incredible work, Ive been reading poems all day and this has been my favorite so far. Very nice job, I cant wait to ready more of your work!
Incredible work, Ive been reading poems all day and this has been my favorite so far. Very nice job, I cant wait to ready more of your work!
This poem is so relatable and it is very well written, amazing job!
A lovely dedication to a person one has never met. Wonderful last two lines.
A great expression of longing and missing something that was never had. Well written.
I can relate since I've never met my grandfather as well, so for me this poem is indeed meaningful.
A relatable poem, I would say.
That was a very beautiful and touching poem you did an excellent job.
I think this poem is very touching and it is a good poem to use to remember somebody by. I just think that you could have written more and been a little more descriptive and have a bit more imagery. Besides that, this is a very beautiful poem